Now, as I dawn on my senior year of football and am faced with two starting positions, I feel like a changed person.Over the years, playing football has taught me what it takes to succeed.Comments: The topic of this essay is how the applicant has matured and changed since his freshman year. One of the strengths of this essay is that it is well organized.
It has changed my entire outlook on and attitude toward life.
Before my freshman year at [high-school], I was shy, had low self-esteem and turned away from seemingly impossible challenges. On the first day of freshman practice, the team warmed up with a game of touch football. However, during the game, I noticed that I didn't run as hard as I could, nor did I try to evade my defender and get open.
I refrained from asking questions in class, afraid they might be considered too stupid or dumb by my classmates.
All the while, I went to practice and everyday, I went home physically and mentally exhausted.
From the minute I stepped off the plane at Cointrin Airport, the vastly different sights along the clean street, the ubiquitous smells of rich delicious French cuisine, and my feelings of excitement about my new surroundings told me that I definitely was "not in Kansas anymore." My school helped greatly in modifying my attitudes, as for the first time I was with peers from countries which I had only read about.
Although it was sometimes difficult trying to find links between my self and my Saudi Arabian, Hungarian, French, Nigerian, or Chilean friends, I soon came to enjoy my new stir fry environment.I realize that it is necessary to risk failure in order to gain success.The coaches have always said before games that nothing is impossible; I know that now. Whether I succeed or fail is irrelevant; it is only important that I have tried and tested myself.Yet my apprehension prevailed as I continued to fear getting put in the game in case another player was injured.I was still afraid of making mistakes and getting blamed by screaming coaches and angry teammates. During my sophomore season, my position at backup guard led me to play in the varsity games on many occasions. Most of the time the mistakes were not significant; they rarely changed the outcome of a play.From months of tough practices, I have gained a hard work ethic.From my coaches and fellow teammates, I have learned to work well with others in a group, as it is necessary to cooperate with teammates on the playing field.As it is, he only tells us about his newfound confidence and drive.This essay would have been stronger had he actually shown us, perhaps by including a story or describing an event where his confidence made a difference. Harvard, International experience: Living in Switzerland"Je deteste des Americains," said the old Swiss woman sitting across from me.There are many reasons you may need to write a personal essay, from a simple class assignment to a college application requirement. Consider each statement a starting point, and write about a memorable moment that the prompt brings to mind.Please select from the following sample application essays: Essay 1: Princeton | Essay 2: Harvard | Essay 3: Princeton | Essay 4: Brown Note: The following essays were not edited by Essay Edge Editors.